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Video Tutorial No. 2 is another exercise in basic editing. It tackles an original draft that needs a bit more work than the one in Tutorial No. 1. If you haven’t seen the first one, do have a look.
Both of these tutorials focus on excess words. These are often found in introductory phrases or clauses. Learning to do without introductions is a hard lesson for most writers to learn. I still suffer bouts of introductionitis, and I’ve been doing this for over 40 years.
I think it comes from our desire to start all stories with a preface or curtain-raiser: ‘Once upon a time in a galaxy far, far away …’ , etc. Many of Shakespeare’s plays have a Prologue that goes on for several minutes of scene-setting. The tradition continues in movies and TV shows. But for most business writing, introductions are nothing but a waste of the reader’s time. Instead of setting the scene, just start the action.
But most excess words are just repetitions and redundancies. Examples are shown in both tutorials.